But now seriously, I’ll try to address your misconceptions:
That’s not a haiku
It is.
it needs to be 5, 7, 5
Not really. That’s like the definition for kids in school, simple but not 100% accurate. There’s plenty of haiku with different metrics, even single syllable lines.
not 6, 7, 4
I count 5-7-4.
The separation of lines matter
Iirc in Japanese haiku are written in one line.
You are kind of right tho. I think it sounds better like ‘He just kicked him out’ but I was trying to making it just taking out words from the original post.
You are right on the counting. Thanks for the correction! I must’ve read ‘-dia-’ as a diphthong, I don’t think I’ve ever said ‘pediatrician’ out loud until now. Still a haiku anyways.
And that tune, almost none of the haiku fit the melody! For singing you have to take into account the accents and on beats. Don’t get me wrong I had a good chuckle and may or might not start doing it myself but as a rule of thumb to recognize (or gatekeep) haiku is not the best.
I want to break it up in a different way.
I need a pediatrician to see my son. Unvaccinated his pediatrician. Just kicked him out.
And how about a haiku?
Need pediatrician My son unvaccinated Just kicked him out
That’s not a haiku, it needs to be 5, 7, 5 syllables not 6, 7, 4.
The separation of lines matters, it’s not just 17 syllables.
Ha! You caught me! Well spotted!
But now seriously, I’ll try to address your misconceptions:
It is.
Not really. That’s like the definition for kids in school, simple but not 100% accurate. There’s plenty of haiku with different metrics, even single syllable lines.
I count 5-7-4.
Iirc in Japanese haiku are written in one line.
You are kind of right tho. I think it sounds better like ‘He just kicked him out’ but I was trying to making it just taking out words from the original post.
“Pediatrician” is 5 syllables on its own, so “need pediatrician” is 6.
Japanese haiku rules who? If it’s English and I can’t sing it to the Jacksfilms Haiku tune, I’m not calling it a haiku
You are right on the counting. Thanks for the correction! I must’ve read ‘-dia-’ as a diphthong, I don’t think I’ve ever said ‘pediatrician’ out loud until now. Still a haiku anyways.
And that tune, almost none of the haiku fit the melody! For singing you have to take into account the accents and on beats. Don’t get me wrong I had a good chuckle and may or might not start doing it myself but as a rule of thumb to recognize (or gatekeep) haiku is not the best.
Reading one-line haiku